Sunday, July 5, 2009

The journey and the call

Down the road she walked
Talking to herself all along;
She spoke of what she was seeing
And learning on her walk.
There was much noise around her
For each passer-by was in a hurry
And shouting in his own way.
The girl was disturbed, yet,
Continued with her journey
For she knew only that.
Amidst all the din
She heard it clear, without a doubt,
A voice calling her; she was so sure.
The girl quietened down her chatter,
Hearing again, this time, clearer, the call.
The unknown voice seemed so dear to her
And pulled her like the greatest bond.
Her hidden chains broke away from her;
She was free, free at last,
As she chose to follow the call.

17 comments:

Rhapsody B. said...

Namaste....
hmmmmmmmm......interesting, almost sounds like death, a welcomed one that is. I could be far off, simply my interpretation.

Have a maverlous week.

A New Beginning said...

"As she chose to follow the call", beautiful!Loved the way you've placed each word in the poem :)Thanks for such great work, its a delight to read it!

Amal Bose said...

i wish i could follow the call im hearing..

beautifully written..

Ayesha Parveen said...

Hi "Rhapsody",

Namaste! Yes, it can be interested as the call of God or the call to move on from this life.

Thank you very much for your visit. Do come again.

Best wishes :)

Ayesha Parveen said...

Hi Sana!

Thanks a lot for your appreciative comment. Words have a rhythm of their own and I have tried to put in words very softly in this poem. Thanks for recognizing my effort.

Best wishes :)

Ayesha Parveen said...

Hi Amal!

Thanks a lot for your encouraging comment

Best wishes :)

AJai said...

A tribute to the higher calling that is a life well lived. Marvelous Ayesha.

Ayesha Parveen said...

Hey Ajai!

Thanks a lot. Best wishes :)

Whirlwind said...

Its very important to listen to your inner voice more than anything else.Very well portrayed in the Poem!!

Ayesha Parveen said...

Hi Swetha!

You are right in saying that we need to listen to the inner voice.

Thanks :)

k.ø.c.h.ü said...

de template brings nostalgia..!! dis was de first skin dat i used.. cheers :)

Ayesha Parveen said...

Hi Kochu!

Welcome to my blog and thank you for your encouraging comments. Do visit again.

Best wishes :)

Rajeev R said...

hmmm......was that voice from the soul, to break away her shackles???

Written well...mysteriously open-ended...liked the idea...

use of similes, metaphors...done quite handsomely...

Write more often...


Raj

Ayesha Parveen said...

Hi Raj!

Thanks a lot for your appreciative comment. You have done a generous critical-analysis of my poem :)

Have a great day :)

manivannan said...

WOW! Beautiful poem ayeshya. Excellently written...She must be lucky to hear the call, most of us fail to listen, nah?

Have a great day!

Femin Susan said...

How awesome! Thanks for sharing!
I really enjoyed reading this post. Keep writing..
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http://www.poems-of-nature.blogspot.com/

Ayesha Parveen said...

Hi Femin Susan!

Thank you very much for visiting my blog and for your comment. Do come again :)

Best wishes,

Ayesha